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    • I do think it is unlikely that Jacob would ask Stephanie directly, at least at his current age. I suspect that until he is older, she also wouldn't answer. That said, I have been toying with the idea of chapters/one shots for the parents that may include Stephanie revealing her proclivities. I've also considered a one shot for Olivia. Her relationship to accidents and pullups is very different than Jacob's. Might be interesting to explore. I want to do another arc for Jacob, but I don't want it to just be, "and then Jacob wore a diaper," though there will be exploration of diapers and potty accidents. I have some loose ideas I need to sketch out a bit. 
    • Thx for the chapters. Their parents are really horrible
    • That was my thought as well. Even a 1 hour Uber rider would be way cheaper, and more bearable, than $6k for work on 3 teeth.
    • Maddison heard about the nap and thought it was a bit of an exaggeration, but she didn't say anything; instead, they headed toward the exit, where the gift shop was located. Maddison looked at all the stuffed animals—she really liked every single one of them, as they were all so cute. She wanted to hug them all, but since she could only pick one, she chose a lion and said, "This one, Mommy."
    • Hi! You’re asking for constructive criticism. I’d suggest you go into more detail about things that aren’t immediately easy for readers to understand. For example, I’d like to know how a campsite in the woods can be a good place to study. For example, are there tables and benches where Sophie and Jasmine can sit at the campsite? I’d also like to know more about the cabin they find. Do they just walk into an unfamiliar cabin? What’s inside besides a desk? Finally, I’d suggest that you avoid line breaks within paragraphs. It makes the text harder to read. Either start a new paragraph or continue on the same line.
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