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So, this might be a little bit off-topic, but I think it still applies here. Minecraft! Minecraft brings out my inner child so much. Watching Let's Plays on Youtube, playing modded Minecraft on my own, it is all wonderful. It is like Lego's, but on a computer. Does anyone else enjoy Minecraft?

We're all in hiding, because we don't want to get put in timeout for being out of diapers. :p

I'm quite impressed with this so far! I'll admit, with the first part I wasn't all that interested. It just didn't really feel that realistic. It was well-written, just not for me. But, I decided to give the second part a chance, and I am glad I did. There's still a gap between where we are and where we will get to, but that's what future parts are for (I'm assuming). Even with the gap, this part answers quite a few questions, and closes the gap significantly. I'll definitely be back for your future installments, since your writing is quite nice and you're a talented story-teller.

Wow. Just wow. I just (finally) got caught up on this amazing story. Not only are you an incredibly talented writer, but you've managed to make the characters extraordinarily believable, which is not common, even among professionals. You can feel BJ's increasingly desperate hope that she's doing the right thing by babyifying her sister, the mother's frustration with her younger daughter and confusion over how to deal with it, and Gabby's upset and confusion and fear. With BJ's efforts becoming increasingly erratic and tangled (both her hypnosis and her stories), one can only wonder which will unravel first, her fibs or her ability to hypnotically manipulate her sister.

Really? That's cool, WB. I guess I'm too far in the Midwest to hear much of it. I still get traces, but that's mainly from the old folk who grew up in southeast Arkansas who still speak that way.

Overall I'd have to say this story looks like it holds a lot of promise. I like that you're taking a bit of time to set up the characters before getting too deep into the story, and it is relatively believable too, which is a huge plus in my book. There are a few minor issues, such as using "there" instead of "their" for possessives, but there wasn't anything that significantly impacted readability. If future installments are as interesting, well-written, and believable as this one, I'm quite looking forward to them.

First, let me say I am really enjoying this story. The plot is solid, and it is clear you've put a ton of work into it. I especially enjoy BJ's feeling that her little sister is being spoiled, even though there's minimal evidence of it. That's something I'm sure a lot of older siblings can relate to. (Not me, I'm the youngest, but my older siblings sure thought *I* was spoiled. ) My only real issue is with the accent. I love it, but I can't help but feel it is a little out of place, or overdone slightly. At times it feels more like it comes from Little House on the Prairie than from the mid 80s. Maybe I was born too late, or I'm too much in the Midwest and not enough elsewhere, but it feels very old-fashioned, even for the mid 80s. That being said, it could just be that something initially reminded me of Little House on the Prairie, and that connection made my inner voice make it sound older than it was intended to. Either way, I still give this story at least 9 stars out of 10.

This is probably where I am. Diapers (and sometimes training pants) are certainly part of my play, but for the most part babyish stuff isn't that fun for me. I'd rather have cartoons and video games over a bottle and Barney any day.

Thank you so much for posting this! I'm always delighted when you post a new story.

A most wonderful story you've got going, Ausdpr! I'm always happy to see you post another bit to a story.

I'd quite enjoy a continuation! It has been a fun ride so far.

I just wanted to let you know this story was beautiful. You managed to perfectly capture the struggles of starting out in a new location, love despite financial circumstances, and how easy it is to fall between mindsets sometimes. Thank you so much for sharing it with us. I will certainly be reading any future stories you post.

I'm in favor of mercy, in a limited way. She can have a choice of certain punishments, that way she gets whatever she thinks is the easiest one.

I'm from the NWA area!

I'm really glad you're working towards accepting yourself, and that your fiancee is accepting!