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    • First, congrats on the new place!  Second and so on! Use quality diaper trash bags, take out used diapers promptly, open the windows and air out the place every so often when the weather is nice, shower/bathe yourself regularly, vacuum/mop the apartment, and burn some scented candles occasionally.  Enjoy your diapers!!
    • Camilla thought about it she wanted Madison to be her baby but at the same time she knew it would take a while, "Alright I promise I won't make you my baby baby and treat you more like a teenager/toddler, but if your bladder and bowels do get worse I will have to put you in diapers I'll still treat you like a teenager but you'll just be a diapered one, but here's important question if you start to act up or disobey me how do want your punishment to be."  
    • I wonder if Liam came to the two essential (for him) conclusions on the dialogues he heard: 1. Claire's action is aiming at interposing another person between Liam and Grace. She's not saying this openly, because it would be counterproductive, but Claire believes that part of the issue is in Grace's approach with Liam. She clearly told Grace "you're exhausted", but what she probably thought was "fatigue is making you not totally lucid on the matter". 2. Millie's main objections are on Liam being ok with her being in charge of him, and not fighting her. When Grace insisted that Liam lost the right to make decisions for himself, Millie's reply was "I'll be gentle". She's clearly afraid to end up into a power struggle. If I were in Liam, I would accept Millie's full supervision and fully comply whith her, but also highlig how Millie is "reasonable" while his mother is not, and how the lack of trust his mother has in him was the primary reason of his own bad choices in the previous days. 
    • Maddison listens and thinks it’s fair, but she has her own terms, too. "Okay, Camilla—or rather, 'Mommy'..."—a sign that things were moving in the right direction—"I apologize and forgive you, but I have conditions for this: I agree to go to daycare, ballet, and etiquette class, but I want to be treated like a high-schooler—without the burden of being overwhelmed, but also without you taking the reins and turning me into a baby." Maddison opens her arms, signaling she wants a hug, and says, "I want you to promise that I won't be a baby, no matter what happens."
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