sherlock

I don't see how the story can be concluded in one final post. The escaped girl comes back and takes her away with her. The disfunctional dynamic with her man can't be resoluted in one chapter. It's clear he's more interested in keeping up appearances than putting her first. Maybe she commits suicide or gers sent to re education. Why is the ending being so rushed? Will it just be the overused "X years later" jump cut trope? Your writing is good but theres no way to close the story out in the space of one chapter ✌️ Have you gotten bored of writing it?

Have you got doubt enough in your mind to even have this interpretation of the words you read? Are you suggesting it's a hoax?

Please drop the covid narrative. Let's not add real life fiction in fiction. But I like the premise. If Evelyn has never gotten out of diapers or returned to them after her brother dies from medical negligence in favour of cooking fatality statistics for a government psyop. I'm in

Can you email the full story to me please My_online_rubbish_bin@outlook.com Would highly appreciate it

....., he's going to need to find three girls that will let him get in her pants, whilst he can't keep his clean or dry. Needs to have sex with three girls, and then the curse is lifted. Good luck with that!

If it's not going to be posted on the forum, no real point mentioning it. This is not a sales page

*pigeon hole

The last three chapters have closed scene essentially the exact same way...., a poopy diaper. It's a little formulaic. Is that the money shot? I really like the premise, but now it seems it's running low or narrative and just aiming for the O each time. I personally don't think the time jump was necessary so early. The narrative had legs, the oxymoron of struggle in the stress free campaign would be so more prevalent in the first year....., the first time all the characters have a genuine accident, being seen by their friends (non subscribers to the government bs) for the first time and that whole situation. If the girl had been found out she was cheating her promoting and still wearing panties and using the potty, the sponsors could have applied some pressure and discouraging tactics. The president arc has the least life in it, he's just a plot tool to further the "law", there's no sense of sympathy in his plight. Maybe I just hate governments. Maybe the story could have the boy cast his mind back to situations in the last year, like a flashback, to explore and expand the first time he realized he's wet without knowing, and when he's seen by girls from school whilst his mom is picking up supplies at the grocery store, and they put two and two together, and his mom checks him infront of them. The year jump has skipped over alot of natural and fall off the tongue story and character progress, and with no clear indication of why or benefit to do so. I feel it's been written into a corner, because the characters haven't had the time to be filled out and the pigeon they're put in in the first few chapters, which is all we know and how we observe them, doesn't properly apply to them in their +1 year development "off camera", and there's a disjoint. The writing and premise is excellent, and unique. I just wonder if you could jump in the delorean and go back 11 months...., you'll find more story there. But avoiding seeing your past self! Thanks for your writing

So ashley has been a year in diapers with no loss of control? Underwhelming for the hetero interest protagonist

My guess is ashley had the unpotty training surgery to promote it, and now *needs* diapers.

Now she's home, she's not regressed, still has her mind, but no teeth, and now needs diapers, her parents are more than likely inclined to treat her the same as her sister, who'd been mentally regressed. When she will want to go back to her grown up life, but struggling with the diapers. Her friends reactions etc, she could get dentures easy enough, to reasimulate, but people will notice the diapers sooner than later

I agree I would like to see more chapters...., i would write with the authors blessing? There's legs on this...., even the man could be caught...

Let's not forget...., the whole premise is that he's supposed to unpotty train himself and then repotty train again - for the article. Has that been forgotten??? It wasn't about being turned into a baby??? Did I miss something??

Questions for the author Which character in the narrative do you make you? If that makes sense. Most authors will put themselves into a character. Often the protagonist, but not always so. My guess would be Addy, but also aspects of meggys contributing parts to the story. Just from how these characters have been written bring me to this conclusion. Also would it be a correct observation to say you seek female romantic partners instead of boys? Just stretching our deductive brain muscles if I'm right, I will expand on how I arrived at these statements

All the pro addys and pro cams. Imagine for a moment. If you were victim in a terrible accident, rendering you comatose, conscious but not 'in the room'. The Dr's have told your significant other that there no possibility of improvement to your state. Would you accept for this other, who had asked you to marry them, to completely drop you, to leave you all alone, to write you off and forget about you. And in the space of acouple of months, having sex with somebody else. Gun to your head. What do you say..., knee jerk answer - blurt, don't consider....

The moment he dropped he resolve of the silent treatment in the car ride home from the court it was clear Addy could make Cameron jump through hoops. She had him right where she wanted him. This is the point where the story breaks fundamentally ......., but she's got boobs you can suck..... "emasculate". to castrate, he'd still have a dick, just no working boys. She 'cut off his dick' metaphorically anyway. and he put it on his forehead.

"fuck college is hard. Thank God I grew that extra inch over the summer, I'm lucky " " oh my God, I'm sitting next to a giant girl with big tits, and she deems to talk to me...... Yes I do your school work for you..., please keep talking to me! " " oh no, beths going to be taken away to be a baby...., wait a minute...., i think she...., liked me...., i could have had sex with her.... " " dammit, now beth is gone.., this giant girl is still talking to me..., maybe I could get to have sex with her" "Addy won't marry me...., i cant have sex with her no more. Woe is me...., guess I'll just concentrate on learning to be a courtroom person... " " beths dad got beth back....., maybe I could go out with her......., no she's become a baby..., off to uni" "I've learnt stuff - maybe if beths dad could move beth to a more progressive state in the country he could grow her up again and I could go out with her and have sex with her...., it will take along time, I should concentrate on learning law right now, make a name for myself. " " I got a job as a lawyer, let's celebrate!....., beths back...., and she's not in diapers and we can have sex!....., oh beths disappeared." "beths broken, I will honour her dad and get this open and shut case through court.. " " oh no, the big tits girl now has me in diapers, I like sucking her tits, I like wearing diapers and girls clothes.... " " yay, I no longer have to wear diapers or girls clothes, I won the case the big tit girl disappeared, I'm so sad I have no one to have sex with or suck their tits" "I've landed a major legal job, the big tit girl is back, I don't want to wear diapers or girls clothes, she has big tits I can suck and she wants me to wear that stuff, so I will immediately " " oh no I got kidnapped, maybe I should become a girl, it's easier to live like that" "im still a boy, I can still have sex with the tall big tits girl, let's get married. She Didnt do anything wrong........, she wants to put somebody else in beths body, in her vagina....., she's got big tits......., urm ok...., beth who.. " What did I miss?

But if addys not the villain, he should feel safe to resist it and complain in her presence in environments not audio bugged. Your argument doesn't make sense. He also happily went out in a dress, not treated as a baby. Theres no supporting internal monologue of any conflict or hate at all. As the other reader was able to surmise and concur - he just rolled over.

I said it's a cross examination of addys character in isolation. A person traits against sociological norms and studies. He took calculated risk, he essentially had the inside track, sleeping with the enemy, in with Dr's, and previous cases, paper trail to safe foods. Prosecution attorneys only take cases they think they are going to win, exspecially high profile cases. Defence attorney take the wide bets. He knew damn well the case was a shut run apart mother in law dearest under hand tactics. In the courtroom, proceedings wise, there was no risk. After he was told there was no cure for beth he THEN gave, there is a definitive turning point and attitude change, he no longer pines or longs for her, it's a recurring bad memory brain fart.not the emotional attatchment that would come from losing a fiancé...., he's never written as being terrible emotionally broken by an of it. He only felt bad when she disappeared, when she wasn't in eye view..., when he couldn't have sex with her. Out of sight, way out of mind........, oh look - addys here now instead......, beth who......, it really is almost "beth who?" and that's horrible. And it actually becomes "beth who". This is the bit I really cannot get past. In all my reading, ALL my reading, I've never come accross something like this.susie salmon moms infidelity pales in comparison to this! In the final chapter, medicine has advanced so much as to remove the plaque. What's the difference to rewiring the brain post neo interoperability for years, compared to repeated ageing down beth (as with addys mom and sis) and allowing her the more years to rewire her brain in her body. What's the difference to rewiring beths brain as beth, regressed to facilitate more time to redevelop, using the same process Aubry and Danica's will endure, which states the memories or learned things she has managed to relearn would remain as she is aged down abit again to provide more time. To rewiring a brain in a recycled body regressed to a baby? The difference is for Addy, rebirth in her removes beth completely and she knows it. She could have easily have asked to do what's happening to her sister. It would garner the same result! If cam loved beth he would think this too. And that process is more tried and tested, not new experimental like rebirth.

Exactly. You have been able to concisely define, and noted from the same point. It could almost be a different story spliced onto the end, written separately as one of several options written simultaneously as other possible continuances of narrative, but maybe not closely as referenced, and this was forgotten by time of selection. It's nice to know others had observed camerons personality shift to compliance and indifference. Although I wouldn't really have given him as much credit to call him a rebel from the get go. When you grow out of favor with, or the protagonist proceeds to lose relevance or investment with you, it's not the fault of the writer or the reader. It just means he is a shitty person. I completely agree with the toxic statement. I'm psychologically still reeling from this conclusion. And nothing in the epilogue can redeem this,can only make it worse.....,unless "it was all a dream"...., but we are not reading early 90s abdl fiction here ?

Cam let go the moment he walked away after learning there was no fix. Addy was removing the last piece on the chess board. In the dimension, it's not out of the realms or medicine to exercise beths body create activity. In our dimension paralysed people have regime of lifting weights with non responsive, below spinal injury level limbs...., if the Dr's had got to a point of rebirthing somebody, I would hazard a guess, they wouldn't be too far away for making progress with people in beths condition (it's not the same types of connections, but if the connections cells, below the brain, in the brain stem, could be replicates and distributed throughout the brain, they MIGHT provide some level of message conductive and relay. But that's beyond my current understanding, and that's our world. Addy isn't stupid, by any means, be removing beths ailing form completely, she removes beths chance of recovery ever. As a very close person to one of the highest profile judges in the country, and with nothing to lose, beth would be top of the list to try any new explorative approved trials and procedures. They could remove the plaque and stabilise. As far as was conveyed beth wasn't intubated or on any life support, her life would continue the same, without plaque. But it was adds move to eliminate this fact. It was selfish of addy, and total alterior motive. Cam didn't care. Verbatim. It's not even a question in my mind. If addy became in such a state, (one can dream) he would drop her too. He gave up. And beths dad had no other support or anybody else that in the 'high ups', to fight beths corner with him. Cam completely left them on their own. Addy will kill her, activate nanites exactly get her adopted/claimed maturosis, the moment she even suspects beth clicks, has been told. Addy hasn't got an honest bone in her body, cam is only honest when sworn in at work

I didn't have a very happy adult hood. The girl I loved died. I fully accept I misplace anger or project. (has anyone read or seen the movie 'the silverlinings playbook'.., when pat wakes his parents up in the middle of the night to complain about the hemming way book. I'm totally channelling that energy right now ? its meant as a comedy, but that's the most eloquent and beautiful representation of borderline personality disorder /mental illness in any media I've ever seen. Bradley Cooper nails it. I can relate to the character alot. Anyway I digress, I feel it's just because I know things and understand things I can't help but apply these facts to fiction...., it's been a very lonely lockdown I feel it's important to give people more information. Something that may seem good isn't. I understand people alot. I probably bring these characters to life and humanise them more than the author. I just have relative supportive knowledge to add to the dialogue. I don't hate THE STORY. I love it...., up untill Cameron gets diapered in caught. It sits on my 'shelf' of my favorite stories...., Sam and jess, the trying policy, witch's of East Warwick drive, baby of the family, several others I can't remember the names of right now (the one where the guy has a shock collar and gradually regresses, the one with magik where the guy tries diaper on in magic shop) it's up there with all of them. But now I consider characters in isolation, like cross examination, and I just annoy myself. Maybe this is why I can never write a novel..., but I would love to illustrate one (my art attatched..., unrelated) It's a character flaw. Just because the rest of the world tells me something is good, if I come to my own conclusion it isn't, I can't really just let it go. I've expanded on my take on things. I've flogged the horse to death. On with the the show for the rest of you xx I have to agree. None of the old beth would remain, the brain would not retain the connections to the parts of the brain for memory or personality, which are not connected really before 2 years old. Recycled is the exact word I was looking for, but being it in such an personified context it wasn't even a term that reached my internal dictionary at time of writing. I can't even deal with still calling her beth, because she wouldn't even look the same. It's unimaginable. This fate is worse than any I have read in abdl fiction or any literature in general. It's almost the stuff of nightmares. The hostility towards addy is justified, she has no come up once for her part, beyond the self flagilation of losing position of power...., but is that really losing anything at all....., enough money to not have to work again, still has an overindulgent vehicle. By events in the narrative, addy would still be classed as a villain. That's no stretch of term. And a villain requires either redemption arc or meets their demise, figurative or contextual. Neither happened. She happily occupied the middle ground and benefitted from playing both sides. I've never encountered such a character before.

The person that comes out won't be beth, won't look like beth won. Have the traits of beth. They've taken beths link from her father, her biological and blood link to the only person she had left away from her. They're basically killing beth but not giving her the dignity to rest in piece no body to commit to the ground headstone in memoriam, they're reusing her body like it's an item of clothing. It further reduces to even lower status than worst case scenario mirror, just a skin bag. And anybody who has the ludicrous idea to at somepoint tell her the truth is a sadist. Children parent like they were patented, that's a siciological fact. Beth will be addys runt of the litter, addy will resent beth, and the other children will be her favorites,beth would be awarded less in her will. Addy wouldn't fit for the same opportunities for beth as she would for her kids she created. The only child she will have post partum depression with will be beth, she would hate everytime she cries and pass her of to Cameron every time. Addy will always see her as "Camerons first love" Sometimes mothers resent their daughters, because unconsciously there's like a natural instinct, they see them as a rival for their partners(their fathers) love (and also occurs with fathers with their baby sons, but there's less prevalence of it) this will be magnified with addys perception with beth) Addy could even attempt to stunt beths growth and put her in situations to risk her getting adopted or to be seen as maturosis traits (which could be claimed to link back to her previous existence) And through all of this cameron just sits back does at told, rolls over, doesn't fight it, as long as he gets to wear dresses and suck addys tits some times. Males are more visual stimulative and retentive gender, with beth no longer looking like beth, Cameron will soon lose or sense of connection of his child being anything but beth in name in honor of her memory. I mean she ceased to exist to him just because her brained was forced into diminished function. This is the unkindest cut of all the slices upon her. And you wish to regail her of her old life - you and your father used to be lovers and set to marry, you had a real father who loved you very much, divorced his wife to protect you, risked his life to recover you. Your fake grandmother caused you permanent brain damage, your fake mother then married your fiancé, your fake mother had your brain washed life ended and had you regressed to a fetus and inserted into her vaginally, that your fiance has been fucking in your absence and had you rebirth ed. You no longer share dna biological link to your father who cared for you so dearly and fought for you when no one else did, you no longer look like you used, are much taller, are a completely different person down to a dna level If kids have a hard enough time finding out /being told they're adopted or an ivf baby, this would kill the poor girl over again. I'm afraid this is abhorrent to me And all the while addy has a huge grin on her face. Her life, her actions had no consequences.

I'm afraid to say this is my natural step of point for this wonderful story. And will not be staying for the epilogue. I speak been wonderful to interact with you all, it's been really fulfilling for me as a reader,to engage with others. I can most closely liken this to when I read the lovely bones. I saw the movie by accident on TV once at Xmas, and it compleeetly emotionally connected with me, and reduced me to tears at several points. Wonderful. Also cause my saoirse ronan crush, even to this day. She's my celebrity free pass ( ). Anyway, so after repeatedly watching, and loving the movie, I decided I should go back and read the novel. Big mistake! Now Rachel Weisz was the weakest turn in the movie, terrible (that's after completely ignoring the nans contribution, I skip her scenes) but in the book the mum character is abhorrent. Her daughter died, and she starts fucking the detective, both behind her husbands back. It's horrible and illogical. I never read beyond that part in the book. Thanks for the memories. I hope to catch up with you all on another story xx

The beth ending ruins. Addy for all intents and purposes performed the killing blow that her family started. She killed beth. She wanted, she asked Camerons permission, and he agreed. She erased beth from existence. They could have removed the plaque and damaged and keep beth and just work with her rehabilitation. They could reduce her age abit to give her more time to relearn things. Or even just to remain beth and and gradually learn abit before she got old and died naturally. Would be fine. I'm afraid that's the worst ending to a story I've ever read. Addy gets everything. This does not sit well with me. Beth effectively becomes the offspring of the woman who's fucking her fiance. It's horrid. I'm afraid I would have prefered if they had euthanized her. Im afraid I can't applaud this chapter. I feel quite negative. Anyway it's 11:45pm here in the u.k,time for bed......, or maybe I'm already asleep and I dreamed..., nightmared this chapter 65,knowing it was supposed to be released today...., and the real chapter will be waiting when I wake up ???