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Dear author, is this story dead? I too love it and wish to read more of it

Maybe a memorandum on it?

Can you include Clark's decline into "more accidents than non accidents" in more detail in the next memorandum, to actually now need diapers and the psychological impact and real world adjustment, how Lyndie reacts etc.

I would love to read more for this. Excellent premise. Please continue

Volume 3........,stacy and Ella move in with Becky, Mel moves in with Jamie and Mandy, Ella's sister comes back and becomes Becky's second little, she requests a level of regression which causes conflict in ella and Jamie's minds, but in a way makes her sister a bit more similar to how she was before Ella was taken and enables Ella to take care of her again. Jamie and Ella have a marriage of sorts,

This doesn't make any sense. Why did you nuke the story? Why did you jump a whole year....., a whole year of his trist with the other boy? And he naturally started to get more control of his pooping, with an implant still in, that prevents control. I just hope my critique didn't kill your flow. It wasn't my intention. Well...., the moderns will soon have an empty nest again. Are you writing a sequel? Your start of the story had good pace, try and do the same thing at the end

Dear Alex. Just finished bothe this stories. I wanted to found out where can I buy the story mentioned at the end of the book 1 thread, the anthology of the 27 years old woman, just not ready to potty training. The Amazon link is not alive. I would like to read please. The other short story in the book about the man is not necessary to include. I hope there is a way to buy. Your work is wonderful x

It's well written and I love the premise and situation. And for the most part the initial statement of orientation was thro wawa, it wasny relevant to the narrative. But now it seems to approaching gutter scenes, which we all love. But unfortunately the gay direction is not appealing at all. It just seems weird you mentioned he noticed the girl, and her bum, kind of a hetero thing. And he noticed it before the boy. A gay interest doesn't really give any legs to the story,he will just be experiencing the same stuff as the protagonist. A straight male female set up would have contrast of situations...., just for example, a girl can hide her nappy better under a skirt, and things like not allowed to wear a bra or breast reduction. In the gay story the love interest is just a mirror to protagonist. I hope this makes sense. You do write really well. This universe could rival diaper dimension to be honest, the extremely tall amazon aspect I always feel unnecessary. Maybe consider writing a sequal or story in the same universe with a girl lead. I might have to jump off point of this stort for now. But would keep an eye out for your new works.

I have a tiny Xmas wish. Would you be able to run a parallel line of chapters, where he went to speak to the girl with the obviously padded bottom and begin love interest with her please. I'm just being honest, to go the Netflix disney route and make this a gay story is going to lose 99. 9% of your readership and engagement. Most people here are into girls. That's just facts. So abit like the Southpark Meme.... "put a chick in it" but make her straight and not lame. I think parents would treat a woman returning to a baby differently, and the woman would have different struggles, and procedures from the Dr. No torches and pitchforks required, just an honest. Request

I have to agree. This has the most miniscule tenuous link to pranks and punishment, which was ended too quickly, a huge jump forward in time. It deserved more. This story really doesn't track or make sense. The mother isnt the same character as in p&p, doesnt interact with the husband the same way. And the premise really doesnt make sense.from where it started with her kids in diapers as punishment and then him. This new direction makes it very weird for her to have put her children in diapers. The original story, with a pinch of of salt and suspension of disbelief, was at least believable. This new one really isn't. Maybe go back and write p&p chapters of the brother and sister plight in between the jump cut forward in time.

There's no tension. The execs are folding over one underling making noise, after several memorandum chapters listing multiple people with about as much info /proof as Pritchard, but they are not perceived as a threat requiring paying off. It's not lovey dovey. It's clandestine, the upper echelon of upper class. Top of the business ladder. Basquing in their affluence. I don't perceive any grit?? Whats your take in detail?

On good faith, I will read the next chapter. I'm afraid I am dubious. The older story I referenced was excellent up until the point they in all but words killed the female deutoragonist (and she was a better character than the Amazon female) it was really gutting after getting invested in the story. I don't feel you can redeem the sense of above everybody and untouchable clandestine that the mummy execs had. Your writing, pacing and grounding in believability has been great up until this point

No, the female assistant that doesn't wear diapers would be the natural angle to go down. Pritchard was a plot tool to mirror the protagonists only just started in the company, and to set the scene of that progressing up the ladder isn't easy, and then is used as an opposite to Clark, to show how Clark is seen differently to Pritchard in the eyes of execs. And how not everyone is suitable for promotion, and how very selective the execs are. The assistant not in nappies, knows of the situation, like Pritchard, but unlike Pritchard she was deemed suitable, even if no diapered currently. The execs and the micro culture they have, which is wider than just that office, the woman they visited first a business trip, the lawyer. It's not a house of twigs. To complete demolish the execs over one guys rumors. Doesn't make sense. The execs community is pretty much untouchable. They know what they're doing. I forget the name of the story, but it was also an excellent novel up to a point - remember the story where two Littles go to uni, I think for Law, and the girl gets accused of maturosis, but the way around adoption, she can go home to her dad, but she loses teeth and potty training. She takes years learning to hold it again, in hopes to see the boy again....., but the boy is with a amazon that makes medicine to destroy Littles, the girls accidentally takes some via shampoo, and all her work us undone, loses her brain, so the amazons solution is to rebirth her, so essentially killing the original character and removing her love rival. I hope it rings a bell. But this story is like that. It gets to a point where the original narrative direction is ruined. I just feel it's happening here.

It doesn't make sense. The inclusion of Pritchard removes the power, status, influence, control and air the executives have, which makes no sense. He's a nobody, deemed not good enough to be a baby assistant. It just doesn't track with the story. How can the babies be so controlled and under the. Thumbs of their respective execs when the execs are so fearful of a guy spreading a rumor, when a whole retinue of people in the memorandums have similar scraps of info to make rumors, and a whole restaurant and an execs daughter has more information to spread rumors, and the general execs don't feel those a threat to them. There was already a male character willingly becoming a baby.., the newer assistant that lyndie was starting a relationship with. Pritchard has no direction to go that the other character couldn't explore better.

Why would he go to lender and the nursery? I think a "pretty thorough NDA" would also include, sort of do not dig any further. Actually going into the nursery would be the opposite. If some disgruntled guy is causing trouble and making allegations out of jealousy, even if they have shred of truth. You don't give the guy ammunition and give him the whole picture and information. You don't show him what he just believes is true. He couldn't have done anything legally because he had no proof, now he has everything and could ruin them, demand more than the pay off. It's just stupid, and makes no sense, a pretty ridiculous move by the execs. If an employee is making some noise about some part of the business not being up to code, but with no actual evidence, you don't escort the guy to show them the actual fault in the system,you get rid of the guy, and you fix the problem on the quiet so nobody else can try and leverage you on it again. Why are they enabling a guys jealous power grab? It's not how a clandestine executive established micro community would react. He was no threat. They'd bury him, make him disappear, make his name mud so that he would struggle to find work anywhere. You've removed the air of control and power the execs lorded. Now they get scared and fold to a guy saying things based on no evidence. They have no fear to go to a restaurant and have the baby poop their diaper at the table publicly, imagine the rumors that would have created was any outside the office, but they fear one insignificant guy making a fuss because he's not climbing the ladder? It makes no sense ...., what about all the characters in the interim memorandum chapters...., why are they not getting paid off? They had equally as much proof as Anderson? At this point I think it would be a good idea to retcon and rewrite or just ammend the. Narrative before releasing the next chapter. I've really liked the story up to this point, but this really doesn't track with the narrative. This may be my jump off point for continuing to follow it