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  1. WBDaddy
    IDK, I would have to imagine that Isabelle would have kept the slippers if she decided to stay little. But to me, the ambiguity was the sell point for the closing. Had you not added the epilogue, I would have been perfectly content making the decision for her in my head.
  2. WBDaddy
    Epilogue makes it crystal clear what she decided.
  3. WBDaddy
    I love the fact that this story is so wildly engaging despite being a fanfic of books I've never read. And STFU about how much diaper content is involved. A great story is a great story is a great story. You've never been much for leaning in on the diaper content anyway, because you're writing stories, not kink service.
  4. WBDaddy
    Even if this was the end of the story it'd be amazing. As usual, Mee, you have such a knack for suspense and emotion in your narratives. You remind me of me at the peak of my (now rusty from disuse) powers. Only better.
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    I mean, not gonna lie, but there have been some things posted here that I think back on and go, "Yeah, ChatGPT probably could have done that better." That's not an endorsement of ChatGPT, just for the record.
  6. WBDaddy
    I'm duly corrected, good sir.
  7. WBDaddy
    Look, a lot of people are using AI as a tool to help them write, but you can't expect AI to write the story for you. It just doesn't work, because it doesn't understand the purpose of the story.
  8. WBDaddy
    You sure? I only remember Luvs doing the gendered diapers, and these are clearly pink.
  9. WBDaddy
    I 100% agree. Everyone's trying to gotcha this creator over some really cute diapers and some really outstanding modeling compared to what we're used to seeing from ABU, Rearz, Bambino, et al.
  10. WBDaddy
    My goodness, what an update, after two months in the dark! Lucky for Daffy the adult diapers in Europe are way better than flimsy-ass Depend briefs (or worse, the Walgreens/CVS knockoffs). Though she might die of embarrassment before she ever gets a chance to test their limits. Can't help but wonder now if this is the final push, that Daffy is never going to see big-girl panties again after this trip. Two weeks in diapers, Mary will for sure insist that some sort of potty-training regimen will have to happen when they get home, one that will certainly prove Daff incapable (Mary is far too skilled at manipulation for Daff to succeed) of wearing anything but diapers going forward.
  11. WBDaddy
    But that's the whole point. They can't copyright character *poses* - only the characters. Otherwise every possible pose has already been covered by WB and Disney in the first 30 years of them making feature-length cartoons. There is no IP violation here. Just some subtle mimicry that Lil Comforts knew their intended audience would pick up on.
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    Disney wouldn't try to claim copyright over what it appears as fetish wear unless there was outright usage of Disney character properties. They'd prefer not to acknowledge the existence of said industry. Even if the poses are "copied", it's not enough to rise to infringement, because no reasonable person would think that the Lil Comforts diaper in any way was made or licensed by Disney.
  13. WBDaddy
    First thing I saw made me laugh: Can't even get the first word of your lead headline right?
  14. WBDaddy
    Ah, okay. I thought you were criticizing the lack of contact. My apologies, I misread you.
  15. WBDaddy
    Nah, Nomad set up the no-contact thing way back in the first couple chapters. You may not remember it, but it was addressed well in advance.
  16. WBDaddy
    Not even a mastery, just making sure that if you're going to have a character be a certain way, they should be that way consistently. If you have a tweener, or even an adult who talks like a tweener, their speech patterns should be reliably tweener throughout the story, not just when it's convenient for them to be that way. That's ironically the trap of trying so hard to avoid repetition in dialogue - you wind up with characters that don't have consistent voices.
  17. WBDaddy
    Yes, that's exactly what I said. This comes down to how well you built the character in question. If you established that this character tends to repeat themselves when under duress, then the reader is just nodding along going, "OK, they're a wreck right now, this must be pretty intense for them." If you didn't establish this character's tendency to repeat themselves, then it's going to seem weird and people might assume you didn't proof yourself very well.
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    If you look at the last thing I posted here - "Daddy's Dilemma" - there's decidedly tweener dialogue coming from the 11-year-old daughter. Especially in the last chapter, where the nervousness is palpable and she leans in on "like" as a placeholder while she pounds out the words she doesn't want to say. Most people don't think as hard as writers do about avoiding repetition *in dialogue*. Outside the quotes, though, repetition is best avoided, though trying to avoid repetition by inventing all sorts of flowery ways to say "said" instead of using other ways to block your dialogue is really, really bad IMO.
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    I 100% agree. I would posit that, in the years since I posted this guide, I have recognized the importance of *blocking* dialogue. Adding in actions, facial expressions, movement, etc. I acknowledge that "said" and "asked" have purpose from time to time. The only purpose I can think of (not saying there aren't other possible purposes) to use flowery verbs like "exclaimed" and "screeched" and what-not is to save oneself the trouble of showing (via other blocking like actions, etc) instead of telling.
  20. WBDaddy
    Little bit of specific criticism here, hope you don't mind. Flooding? Seems like a weird way of describing it - unless you're an ABDL. If you're implying that she didn't wet in her sleep and therefore had a full bladder, then it makes logical sense, but "flooding" is a strong word that doesn't really mesh well with the rest of the scene.
  21. WBDaddy
    Your dialogue seems off. A guy who doesn't have any interest in wearing diapers is going to say something like "I don't even get why you want me to wear diapers! It's weird and sick!" All the dialogue seems too formal to me. Also, you have homonym issues you might want to fix here. For the record, the premise you're hinting at here is definitely something unique and, if executed well, could be a really good story. Partner who wants to be a CG wearing down vanilla partner until they agree to participate, weird things blossom, lots of tension in between lots of sexy stuff? Sure, I'd read that.
  22. WBDaddy
    There's a Facebook tag group called "Americans will use anything but the metric system for measurement" - and it's hilarious. All the situations where people compare size/volume/distance to "(number) of (random objects definitely not standard units of measurement)" show up there.
  23. WBDaddy
    We are all our own worst critics. I read material that I wrote 10 years ago that people gushed about for years after and I say to myself, "Damn, there is so much I could have done better here!"
  24. WBDaddy
    You've done a great job of slow-burning here. Izzy's steady regression coupled with memory erasure is really good. One thing I'd suggest to make it easier to read is to break paragraphs when you change speakers. For example: Is much clearer and easier for the reader to follow like this:
  25. WBDaddy
    I submitted another one (Mom+daughter/son) that was extreme and obvious abuse on a middle-school kid just to see if it got any "abuse" complaints, and to no one's surprise, it didn't.
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