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  1. FloridaKid
    Still betting there’s a loophole or something that will get Vic back to the world of the living. Maybe big sis (Lucy?) has some sway since Vic is Nia’s GF. I mean if Lucy is the Prince(ss) of Darkness, shouldn’t Nia be the Child of Darkness?? Work with me here…I’m in denial. I love that you’ve continued the bureaucratic Hell theme literally all the way to the end of Vic’s experience. I’ll be interested to see from whose perspective the next chapter is seen.
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    @Tisha Looks like your AI artwork posts got wiped along with a bunch of other content on this site. Loved the pics, so please repost. 🙂
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    Cute one-shot or the beginning of a larger story? Your world has lots of potential and I’d sure like to know what’s so special about the black box!
  4. FloridaKid
    I love this whole story, but we’re in the thick of things now!
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    I do love how you flipped the script on that one! I also love the “Gee-off” line. Makes me think of how the puppet Peanut refers to ventriloquist Jefah-fah Dun-Ham.
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    I’m with Baby Billy here…the meeting with the dean went way better than I thought it would. I figured Connor crushed it on the placement tests, but really thought they’d try to stick it to him because he’s a Little. I love how you’re putting Cassie in as a friendly go-between for Beth and Connor. I have the feeling that relationship will help keep them out of trouble from time to time in the future. I’m interested to see where you take the Holographic Field Theory thread. My guess is that’s the core of the story. I mean, the possibilities are endless if you can control matter and want to exert power over people, right?
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    Granted, there was plenty of AI manipulation, but I feel like there were opportunities for Beth to hit the brakes or end it entirely and yet she chose not to. My hopeless romantic nature would like to think she did that out of love for Tish, but given the obvious suffering it caused I felt that Tish was justifiably angry. Yeah, I was Team Tish all the way. And yes, the fact that despite Tish’s reluctance she chooses to force her way does irritate me, however I do appreciate how you flipped the dom/sub dynamic in their relationship and through that lens it makes sense. Please don’t think my comment means I didn’t like the story. Your world building was wonderful and I loved it.
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    I liked this story but I’m honestly really torn. Part of me is just really angry with Beth for manipulating Tish, however that’s tempered by Tish’s underlying needs and hidden desire for a relationship with Beth from the start. I’m interested to see where you take them in the future.
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    Probably should have mentioned it much earlier, but I love reading your comments (here and elsewhere). ? I read on a tablet and have the screen zoomed in slightly, which means I have to swipe left a bit to see the author of a comment, but I can always recognize yours before I swipe over. Wow. I love how much this says about the story to this point. Perhaps this is why it’s one of your favorite chapters? No way Vic dies here. If nothing else, I’m betting on love to overcome anything these idiots can throw at them. You claim to be mean, but I know better.
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    I had to chuckle because I’ve said that before. My kids just roll their eyes…? Thanks again for the frequency of your posts. An almost daily BabySofia fix…my eyes are practically glassy.
  11. FloridaKid
    @Mia Moore…Spring Break is done and you’re in the home stretch for this school year! Any chance you’ll be getting back to the academyverse in the near future? Would love to read more of Ai and Kione…
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    Yeah… I’m going with cult here. I don’t imagine demons would need to hit you with an iron skillet and up to this point Nia has been able to sense demon presence. So glad Vic finally opened up to Nia <nope…not me wiping away some tears…just my allergies> People can be so ignorant and inconsiderate. Unfortunately, you don’t have to look far IRL to see that many of those prejudices still exist and are being amplified people who simply cannot understand or accept anything that differs from their narrow view of what the world “should be.” Only YOU could have a cliffhanger after the cliffhanger. ?
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    Woohoo!!! And we’re off! So happy you’re posting more of this story. No apology necessary…glad you could take a break when you needed it. ❤️?
  14. FloridaKid
    Please, sir…could we have another chapter of Unfair? I know we’re supposed to be patient, but it’s so hard when the story is this good. So many loose threads that I’d love to see tied up. ?? Pretty please?
  15. FloridaKid
    Be still my heart…TWO BabySofia stories going at the same time! <swoons> Between that and LittleFallenPrincess’ current story, I’m in heaven! ❤️?
  16. FloridaKid
    I love the story you’ve written here. I care about the characters and I like that you’ve included some level-headed Amazons to offset the crazy ones (not totally, but at least a little). That said, I agree with @BabySofia regarding the length of the latest chapter. I also read pretty quickly, but found myself checking the scroll bar after awhile to gauge how much was left in the chapter. The unwritten rule for a performer is to always leave the audience begging for more, and BabySofia is the Queen (Princess?) when it comes to that. I second her advice. I am very much looking forward to more of this story. ?
  17. FloridaKid
    Another great chapter! Can’t wait to learn what’s on Vic’s mind. If your pattern holds true, we only have about 8 chapters left…gotta find out soon (I hope).
  18. FloridaKid
    What a delightfully unusual story! I love how you introduce the dragon facts. It’s reminiscent of the way Isaac Asimov preceded each chapter in the Foundation series with excerpts from the Encyclopedia Galactica.
  19. FloridaKid
    @inconkit Your comments regarding martial arts are spot on. I studied taekwondo years ago and noticed the differing terms in the story, but honestly just chalked it up to a blended martial arts style. However, you are absolutely correct regarding the rivalry. Kudos to BabySofia for being open to your suggestions!
  20. FloridaKid
    Love this short story! Not at all what I expected in a DD story…simply adorably different ddlb perspective. Thanks for the warm fuzzies!!
  21. FloridaKid
    You just made my day!!! Can’t wait to get back into the story! thankyouthankyouthankyou…❤️?
  22. FloridaKid
    Ava…there ya go…time for backstory! Woohoo I love this story! Sassy Nia…I love sassy Nia..?
  23. FloridaKid
    Love it. I especially like how you’re dropping hints at the reality warp that’s occurring. Just familiar enough to Iz to seem right, but confusing at the same time. Not knowing how long this story will be, I don’t know how much of a slow burn you have planned. I love the pace so far. I do like the revised format for your characters’ thoughts and dialogue. There are a couple of places to clean up the closing quote marks, but IMHO it makes for a better reading experience. Thank you for being open to suggestions!
  24. FloridaKid
    A few days ago I noticed comments from BabySofia and kerry pop up for this story and thought to myself, ‘If they’re reading and responding, must be worth my time…’ Definitely a good call. Character development and world building is something BabySofia is remarkably good at, and I can see why she likes your writing. I appreciate your attention to detail and your investment in each of the story’s characters. I also noticed the subtle changes in Iz’s mom in the last chapter and now I wonder if Wednesday’s performance will be something more like a preschool dance recital. And in my mind all sorts of red flags were waving when Iz considered having Avery go to her babysitting job. I do have a suggestion for you. Sometimes it is a little difficult to distinguish your characters’ thoughts from their dialogue. A technique that some writers use is single quote marks for thoughts and double quote marks for speech. Here’s an example of what I mean: “Do you…” I started to say and then felt the warning look from Hannah and the internal warning from Caireen. ‘This is what I’m talking about, Sofia,’ she said. I sighed, “Get it over with, please…?” I looked at Hannah. In this excerpt from Emerald Princess by BabySofia (yeah, I’m a fan), everything within quotes is spoken or thought by the main character. It is immediately obvious to the reader when non-spoken lines occur. There have been a couple of paragraphs in your story where I thought the use of single and double quotes would have helped clarify whether someone was thinking or speaking. I really like the way you’ve developed this story and I’m looking forward to more!
  25. FloridaKid
    “Or something equally dark.” Hee hee. I knew we were having too much fun. This is such a great story. ?
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