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just gotta say been following this story for awhile and it's tremendous. First, it's character driven rather than action driven, which is my preference in general as well as the mark of any good storytelling. with distinct characters as well. second, it solves so many of my perceived problems of AB/DL writing in general. The first being, how the hell do you make ABDL narratively interesting? The goal of ABDL writing in general is wish fulfillment, either of erotic, emotional or cathartic varieties. But wish fulfillment is not interesting to read. There's no inherent conflict to drive narrative tension. So authors have to create one. Some authors create it with conflict exterior to the main narrative focus of ABDL. Generally these conflicts are pretty thin, but even when well executed they are an obstacle to the main focus. The wish fulfillment. I just don't care that you character is a billionaire, private eye or that there parents are getting divorced. That's not why I am reading. I'm reading because of the diapers. The other issue is that after the wish fulfillment happens whatever narrative tension exists is gone. Also it is pretty boring to read about the idealized ABDL life. The life of an infant or toddler is boring. What I love about this story is the solutions to those problems. First the narrative focus isn't the ABDL wish fulfillment, it's the characters relationship, with ABDL sprinkled on top. And the relationship is very well executed, with enough abdl/ageplay tension to keep the tension going. this solves the wish fulfillment is boring problem. The second solution is vignettes rather than continuous storytelling. Skipping forward in time to moments that are heartwarming, sexy, funny or conflict focused is brilliant It skips all the day to day moments that none of us really care about and firmly focuses on how the characters relationships grows over time. this solves the idealized ageplay is boring problem. I could write more but ill just say this not just the best ABDL writing I've ever read. Heck this is the best romance writing I've ever read. I've seen other ABDL authors pick up on what makes your work special and I hope even more do too. Great work. Looking forward to the next chapter.

yeah I worry about readability with my stuff a fair amount, I never found yours distracting though.

In this case, I'm attempting to play in Personalias ballpark more, about the horror of the fantasy realized, I also just posted more of YGWYN so the story is more around 6000 words I think.

Thanks, I appreciate the praise. It was on Abdlforums as well.

Understood.

Hello all.

Has approximate knowledge of many things.

^ not so secretly wishes they could massage a koala.

finds the periodic table erotic.

can't get turnt up

Wishes he was a filthy brit

Still has dreams!

once had a birthday party that nobody came to...

enjoys being pecked to death by many adorable penguin beaks

dreams of beautiful things then drinks to forget them

Sure, I'll work something up. Thanks for the compliment.

Well, to address your first point, as to the fact that there doesn't seem to be many stories with fetish elements/sub-plots, I could offer two explanations. One, most people read these stories to masturbate, receive emotional gratification, or both.

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first caveat, I comment knowing fully well that my opinion is just my own. second caveat, I am, mostly and consistently, an idiot. third caveat, This comment means I have a responsibility to respectfully tactfully engage with all members in the thread who respond or reference me.

enjoys the smell of their own farts to a distasteful extent

Oh posted that on the main page, not sure if it's ready yet but only one way to tell. I might have to start from scratch again but every build has gotten better I hope. sorry for thread hyjacking btw

I haven't posted on this one yet, but to start I'd say that CK, I just reset everything when I get stuck.

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I have nothing against the idea, it might even be useful for people experiencing writers block to try a different prompt out. I can't remember if I posted it but I think I would be interesting to get a couple of writers from the site to try to write basically the same story. A good way to see the differences in their writing styles.

yeah do you think there is a way to avoid that without having the character constantly talking to themselves in their own head about the other person? that's what happened with my earlier draft, and it bugged me. I mean, for sure that part of what the early parts of dating are like, figuring out the other person, kind of discovering them over time. But it felt really calculated to me, and kinda of false in some way. A little hollow.