Sararei

im catching up after about a month and or 2 so semi late to the party but I was surprised Kelly was actually a "bad guy" here. For various reasons I was assuming shes was just typical amazon, but semi red hering and would actually help when the "real bad" people show up. Either way i feel like a ball will drop soon, and im sure people we think we can trust are going to spring into action, i feel almost all the "phew" moments are just trying to get them to let thier guard down (atleast until the body guard seems to be opposite atm lol) I feel like the school was having a whole cartel starting back up again and when the kid of the one that took them down the first time showed back up, they know they had to take him down. Like that one I think unamed girl a while back that just said she was a "friend of her mothers" I expect there might be a lot of people that were negatively impacted like Kelly and are just waiting to spring the traps.

I just feel if its too close or exactly it, it might influence the author to alter or change it thinking it was too obvious or what not. In these style of writings where its bit by bit with live feedback vs a real book or movie or w/e its impossible that authors dont get at least a "little" influenced by readers comments

Im over here waiting the real bomb to drop tbh. Would it be bad to post what I think is going to happen just in case its a bit too close to home?

Dont take any of the bits of my rant wrongly, just in case , thats normal brain forgetting its not real life lol Ungabunga brain loves it

Man, the Gaslighting is going to be STRONG with this one lol. I am a bit strange when it comes to hypnosis in this type of media, a part of me loves it and seeks it out, but thats assuming my over empathetic side doesn't come out and slap me upside the head. It gets worse with longer stories but i have ways to quell it a bit lol but its already at odds with each other in this one. I guess i get there faster with DD stories when they are portal littles, i always wonder why they never seem to add that to thier argument, i mean id be like , first off, im NOT a LITTLE, im a human being from Earth and im equal to you in equivalency. I am held prisoner in a forign land and am not allowed to return to my life or family. I always feel a statment , while likely not changing anything, would atleast give the satisfaction of gut punching any "nice" bigs but i digress. Regardless... This is no comment to the method of the story to be clear, but from the perspective of a person in this fictional world i find that "minor tiny not such a big deal hypnosis" to be pretty much the same level as any other, i consider any mind alteration "mind mutilation" and am glad we dont have it in IRL. (god how fked up would real life be if hypnosis was like it was in fiction :z ) While it was subtle in this experiment, its like a gateway drug that induces un earned trust and paths to him accepting his fate (as intended of course) anywho, rant done, I look forward to more !

im reading like 3-4 long running DD stories and its always interesting to see the different takes. But one thing that is common among all of them is....Bigs are psychos lol. Although it wouldn't be very fitting to the nature of most the stories here, ive been having thoughts of a story involving basically a inter dimensional war. Essentially 2-3 "little" dimensions tired of the "opps" half of our tour group got "lost" or a few abductions of a few too many high ranking people and not enough kick back for governments to supress it anymore, gather up a massive army and use some new secret portal technology to teleport in say the ocean with 10s of thousands of battleships and aircraft carriers and other various war implements and begin the attempted take over of the entire amazon planet. With a few planets of support and likely rallying the native poplulation despite likely being more primitive in technology, could littles take over and what would that mean. lol On a more grounded level though been also thinking much smaller scale of a privately funded OG earth (ours) ops task force dedicated to recovery of kidnaped earth littles and ofcourse maybe it fails horrible once >_>

So While waiting for chapters and needing something to do, over the last 2-3 weeks i read ALL the other stories you wrote. LOL how did i miss these? i am re reading the story now, but with like 10000% more context and its so much better lol. I had a alot comments as i read but sadly wasnt there in the moment to comment as it was done but I enjoyed alot of it. You def created a world and some people i love to hate

SPOILERS for previous works and current story (maybe?) but it seems its already been discussed in comments before and im just not reading them and/or very slow in the head lol I just had one of those, oh shyt moments. I was reading your other work on and off with Exchanged and was at the BBQ family chapter and up to now i was like, hmm something feels familiar, but sides the college name nothing was connecting fully, but a few things and names were popping in my head....then the grandfather says he teaches martial arts and that finally was the wait a minute moment. looked up some names via search and saw some familiar characters lol going to give a good bit of new context

So its implied but does demerit caps = daycare then = adoption? might see it later in the story but wondering what the whole daycare experience entails, although i can hazard alot of guesses based on other DD universe stories. in this particular world/story do they all know what they are getting into? are they told or do they agree that screwing up in some ways basically leads to enslavement ? assuming the loop i listed above? obviously there is some fowl play but in general they wouldnt state that but I also cant believe most people would even consider it, or that our side of the portal would even allow it with out full consent and even then.... if they are not told, is our side (government etc) aware? or just willfully ignorant? "morning jim, we get anyone back from the exchange program this year? " "No Phil, all unaccounted for" hmm thats 1038 these last few years, wonder whats up...." LOL Not that its a problem as its a story in this universe , just wondering what your head cannon is.

Did you ever get around to that character web sheet? I took a month off and catching up but didnt see one, thought you had a chapter you wanted to wait too? its not a biggy but still think it would help side note/question: DD stories are not 100% the same between people, each person has a flavor following the main concepts, but one thing in the last chapter got me thinking a bit more and wonder what YOUR headcannon is for this: What makes a Tweener a tweener? what makes any of the 3 what they are? see size obviously plays a massive part, but is that it? dont recall if anyone else gave it more, but a short amazon and a tall tweener, where does that 1 inch really come into play? like are they actually like races where DNA wise you can be classified?

Personalias, I am slowly catching up with this story and its amazing, the take on the DD world and the drama is great. But i just finished chapter 88 and for a long time now, ive had an annoying thing i do when I engage with really any media flair up and i get "frustrated" when I get a bit too empathetic and want to speak for a fictional character in a fictional world. But this chapter hit on one side of the conversation i was hoping would be had eventually and i just had to comment on it. Since (at this point) we don't know who screwed Clark over, I wanted him to suck it up and take advantage of both his relationship current and past with Beouf and Janet (and Tracy but just for indirect support) maybe Zoge but optional. use his mind to manipulate the conversation but only just a little because i cant help but feel (but i am projecting) that most all of it would be sincere. (all this before chapter 88s reveal though) Tell them what they partially deep down may know, tell them (story style rant below, warning) "my mind and soul are cracking, I want my life back. You took everything from me, my job and kids, my pride in teaching them and hoping i was making a difference, a difference that despite the dangers of being forced to contend with the likes of Brolish and Forest, I felt was worth it, worth it see my kids grow and become better people. Took my dignity by forcing me to confront those same people day in and day out being reduced to this.. took my freedom and my future...took my happiness, the one person i truly loved in this world, my wife, now out there somewhere, lost or taken or alone.... all this taken by people I thought were my friends...people I thought I could trust. I was poisoned, drugged and no one will believe me, you all , the people that helped me through that bullshit story by you student, the planting of evidence by the same crazy teacher hurting my kids in the room next door... Janet, you saved me from that crazy lady that tried to kidnap me after graduation, and yet as soon as I needed you all the most, you turned on me, quicker then I ever thought possible , dismissed all my crys for help, made up or attributed some missing diapers in the classroom to me, to further cement my fate, dismissing me as a product of some fake disease "you saw coming". WHY!? why now did you not take my side? what did i do deserve this spite? was my anxiety of being on edge not only from the story incident but almost being kidnapped last year a sign I didnt deserve my freedom anymore? my lack of maturity to deal with my life being taken, to become a slave or property to someone 3x my size? Last month I was made to have those damn training chocolates, I experienced directly the ramp up, the height and descent of their effects firsthand , it was the same, Melony..I got the same feeling in the mornings after our coffee, I thought i was just a bit sick, that maybe my anxiety was just flared up but would go away with time, thats why I used your bathroom in a hurry, thats why during that meeting...I...I. I didn't believe, couldnt believe you would give me anything after all this time to hurt me. I let my guard down, Cassie warned me to never trust anyone but I did...I trusted you... Please, I am all thats left of Clark Gibson, hes dead and I am a shadow....I embody all his pain and regrets, fears and confusion...please, with any last bit of respect for the man I was to you, please either tell me why...or believe me." LOL sorry this was my fan fiction in my head up to chapter 87, this changed a bit with chapter 88 and now my theory that it was sadly either Tracy or even his own wife Cassie that was somehow involved in all this has grown even stronger...Hot take I know I look forward to your continued story and see where these new developments take the journey. Thanks!

Can we get a character family tree? lol There is alot of family on just his side here and each week i keep forgetting whos who in relation, what type they are size wise and such.

I am only on chapter 6 so late to the party but I had only a minor criticism. Overall the story is good, and interesting however I cant help but feel the acceptance of this loop, even for Tommy (the good kid) is too fast. You covered alot of stuff in the start, really built up a good bit of the rules of the road of this world, but once Tommy got there (ignoring the stuff about legal course and such) I feel like it was too easy to start. even with the more unique circumstances , I feel like its now a story about a little and his girlfriend/mommy going about thier RP time on the weekend. Even knowing its suppose to be short and best to keep his school/life from derailment , there is just too little resistance and shock going on imo. I say this because who are the "others" that would be assigned here? even cherry picking the least violent or "just need love" young adults that need a second chance, I cant picture that initial prep alone "just going with it." I feel like someone (even described as above) would have said nah screw this, or punched several people or worse lol. There doesnt seem to be anything preventing true rebelion or agression. Im still not sure why tommy fell asleep lol, on either end of the emotional spectrum, id be wide awake. Which brings me to the next point, I assumed there would be like, seditives or somthing. I know you ruled out "drug or hypnosis" due to the history being bad , but I assumed it was just going to be paired back a bit, as with any sense of realism, unless all the people that come here knew exactly what they signed up for, atleast in the moment before rationalization could kick in, they wouldnt just go with this unless you hit the lottery and got someone that secretly had a AB kink or Little mentality. I assumed it wouldnt get more then the truth drug durring the interview but still somthing. Now dont get me wrong, this doesnt have to be a Dark story, or a mix like Velvet (love that story chain btw) , while i much prefer the darker, or forced side of this literature, I feel like the rationality and human side fell apart when the good bits started. I will continue to read and I hope this doesnt get taken to harsh or such, Just my 2cents