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I know I already gave my feedback and likes elsewhere, but I still want to show my support for this story here. You’re doing a fine job. Also you have to watch out for that potty monster. He’ll sometimes sneak up on you.

Good chapter. My one and only critique is the several paragraphs about diaper rashes 😂. However it was well written and informative so can’t knock it too much 😝 Love the fancy diaper bag. I did not see them not allowing the foster mother inside, though I should have. Though I am curious if there’s a specific reason a Nurse came and got them other than they wouldn’t scare the kids and are best to handle any incidents the kids have. I could see the Nurse getting them especially if the visitation with the mother is in or connected to the infirmary. I can’t wait to continue reading to discover what happens next.

With the given explanation and understanding of your new world it makes way more sense. The only reason I thought it might be AI was because there was no explanation of certain statements or phrases as part of the world building and that you mention that Little’s are adults several times. Now that you’ve explained the world building then why I thought of AI is no longer valid. Thank you. I went and read part 2 on DavientArt. I really like it. I think you did a much better job. My only criticism now with this chapter is maybe in certain spots where you mention cutoff or becoming a Little, what that means. Usually something like, when I failed my Adult Little exams so now I’m adopted or something that makes it more natural and not like an info dump. But that is just my two cents. Otherwise I am now invested and will continue reading this story as you continue. And I’m sorry if I came across harshly. I’m terrible at conveying emotions in real life, doing it in text is next to impossible. Please continue to write, learn and improve. If one isn’t changing and hopefully improving themselves, they are not living.

I don’t know. My conclusion is you either need to rethink your wording, phrases or do some more world building so we understand what you mean by certain phrases or statements. There’s constant implications that Littles aren’t always Littles. That they suddenly become Littles for some reason and then I guess not Littles at some point after their “cutoff”? Overall it felt contradictory I guess. Like it would say one thing and imply the opposite later. You’re constantly mentioning that Littles aren’t always adults. I don’t know, it feels like you ran some prompts through an AI and pieced it together. Especially with the constant comments about everyone being adults for no reason. Just sounds like trying to go around an AI safety guidelines. If this is AI it should be put in the AI section. But as for a DD story I didn’t understand that world you created. It seems like the world isn’t entirely the same as almost every DD story. Which is fine, but there needs to be more world building to explain things like cutoff dates and the day you become a Little. In every DD story I’ve read Littles are born Littles and stay Littles. The only exception to this is if an Amazon is being shrunk due to breaking the law. Some DD stories have them shrunk down to Betweener size and made to do manual labor of some kind like bagging groceries. In other stories they’re shrunk to Little size for a period of time.

Love the update. It didn’t sound like they told Amanda any actual details about the mother over the phone. But it does sound like she was asked to bring the girls somewhere the following day. I’m hoping it’s the police station and we get to see the mother one last time before she’s taken off to jail to await trail. Of course they’d need a more permanent situation for the girls. I’m sure by now they know Heather is a Little so Heather, as an unadopted and unregistered Little, would probably be sent to an adoption center while Becky would either stay with Amanda or be sent to a long term foster family or other family members till the conclusion of the trial. (The only reason I hope they see the mother again is I hope she’s obviously diapered and winces whenever she sits down or shifts in her seat and possibly be heard begging not to be forced to poop her diaper as she’s being taken away, or some scenario where we see or hear about her being spanked, diapered and a mention of her in a messy diaper 😂 . Obviously 😂) Part of me wonders if Ivy had high jacked the phone call and was the one Amanda was talking to and had given Amanda an address to take the girls so she’d be able to ambush them and get Heather.

I can’t wait to see what happens next. To see what will happen with Ivy and what has and will happen to Diane and her daughter. I have a feeling Diane has already thrown a tantrum and spent at least the first night with a red bottom and possibly even diapered and they might even have a version solitary confinement but is a nursery looking room where they’re gagged, diapered and restrained in cribs usually after being spanked and given an enema. So many possibilities for each person of the story.

Yes I definitely like the revised version. Good job.

I think she followed wherever Heather went. It’s the only way to get her back whenever an opportunity presents itself and it won’t if she’s anywhere else. The real question is how will she enter back into the story. What’s the plan. I honestly think she needs to find a way in. She needs to make the opportunity. She doesn’t have the luxury of time to wait for the cosmos to align. I still hope she gets caught sneaking in and spends an hour or so in the corner after receiving a bare bottom spanking, an enema and diapered by foster mom. Only downside is that Heather will be sent off with Becky to an orphanage or adoption. Especially Heather when it’s discovered that she’s a Little.

Nice update. I’m surprised she let Becky wear training pants since she was wearing a diaper, but it seems like it won’t be long till Becky is back in diapers full time. I’m definitely curious about how Heather is doing. Obviously she’s been arrested, or at least Becky would be back with her. I bet she threw a tantrum when they informed her of her arrest and ended up over one of the officers knee getting a bare bottom spanking and an inflatable pacifier 😂 I am curious about Ivy as it’s definitely passed the date she’s to meet her employers or at least past the date to be on time. So I’m guessing she’s going to try and get Heather and just hope for a small pay cut for being late. Heather is just not going to get out of this. The only question now is how comfy and how much of her kind will she keep.

Did something happen to this story? I remember it being longer? Or am I remembering another story?

I love the foster mom. I wonder how old of an Amazon kid she’s fostered that left her no longer potty trained? I bet the answer is 17 or 18 and instead of graduating and moving out and up in life, they got adopted and had to start schooling all over due to potty issues. I wouldn’t be surprised if she’s the cause of adult Amazons potty issues. I’m hoping she’s on the strict side. I suppose we will see when the Amazon child needs to use the bathroom. Great chapter. I do love it from her POV.

Same

That is a good question. Surprisingly it didn’t even cross my mind. It would open up an entirely different story avenue. Yes it does since it’s clear that she chose to put everything on this particular Little. Even if she does get Heather, will Ivys buyers accept Heathers current status? Would Ivy have to unload Heather to someone else and get less money with a lot more risk, would the current buyers buy Heather and pay Ivy less and would they punish Ivy further for delivering “damaged goods”. I could see the mommy deciding to give Ivy a bare bottom spanking and a mouth soaping for going back on the deal, might even consider it lying.

I kind of want to see Ivy try to get to Heather and wind up standing in the corner after being given a bare bottom spanking, an enema/suppository and a pacifier. While they wait for LPS to show up. Which if she fills her diaper before they get there or before being booked then she’ll be looking at more problems than just prison time. Of course that would mean that Heather will most likely end up in an adoption center alongside Diane’s toddler girl.

Great chapter. I’m curious if we’re going to see some of the POV from Diane. Big sis isn’t going to be happy when she’s told she’s wearing a diaper, just use it. Especially if she has to poop. Heather should just go alone for the ride at this point. I don’t see her having much say or influence at all anyway.