mizuma

Whenever I read a really good story I feel compelled to write something about. What I liked, what worked well, just about anything to let the author know that someone out there appreciated their work. Similar to life, I like to take my comments on a story as they go and let my fingers do the work and then view the after effect.

First of all I would like to say bravo for your courageousness in writing and posting your story. Many a time has an amateur writer attempted to write a story about a babysitter, usually a girl, who ends up for any odd reason wearing a diaper and half the time, pleasuring thyself in it. Usually when the story is written, it is done in haste with a lust filled mind-set at hand. I too once fell victim to the writing of a horribly cliche babysitter story but was sane enough to scrap it and think again. You however chose to write this story even knowing that it may turn into a "quick fap", if you will, for the readers that would leave everyone satisfied for the moment while your text would be heavily criticized in the future... Luckily, your story here is not the case. Instead of what might of been, you gave your story life, a main protagonist, smooth flowing dialogue and little to no grammar errors. Rachel's obsession of diapers was not created out of some spark of curiosity straight out of the first few lines of the story but was already present in her life well before we started to read about her. I really like that by writing it that way instead, it allows a background story to arise without any actual need of mentioning one. "Diapered Babysitter" is one of the most, actually no, THE most loved theme when it comes to diaper fiction and has failed to be portrayed correctly for a very long time. You have not only managed to write a story about a babysitter who gets off on diapers, you have turned that idea into a piece of fiction that has probably left many breathless and waiting for more. I think that some people may be ashamed to admit that they like to read diaper fiction for more than just the literature of a good story and actually take some sexual gratification out of reading something like this. I don't think there is anything wrong with that. It is no different than reading and erotic tale although they would be very "vanilla" compared to this . We all have our kinks and there is nothing to be ashamed of. It just annoys me a little when people only post a one sentence comment after all the work you have put into trying to formulate a decent story. It's nice to know that someone likes your story and that is better than no comment at all but without any extra feedback, you don't know what to improve or how to improve it. As I said earlier, Bravo and I admire your courage! You've done a great job at portraying how a well written story can turn any cliche into a great piece of fiction, erotic or not. On a last note, I too would love to read more and can patiently wait as long as necessary for the next installment. Yours Truly, Mizuma~!

First off I would like to say that I really like the context of your story and how it has turned out. Obviously from the start, we the reader know where this story is going to lead after reading the first chapter but that is the whole point. Lay down the scene and set up the destination. Makes it easier for the reader to know if it something that they would like to continue and even easier for you to not lose focus of the end goal. The character development is simplistic but to the point. The description of appearance is not necessary when the mind can use the power of imagination to fill in the gaps with a little guidance. The theme of Forced Babyification is one that many fantasize about and would love to happen to them but if the situation were to turn from a harmless fantasy to a reality, people would probably not be so welcoming to the idea. This was easily interpreted through Clara's actions of resentment and total fear. Yet apart of her, the illogical side that is driven by pleasure, is secretly loving that her ultimate fantasy is being forced upon her and she has no say. To become completely submissive without will. Whether she likes it or not. I hope my message is clear in saying that I really loved your story so far and would love to read more in the future. My message may seem very long winded and some might say "Why didn't you just say that in the first place?" but I wanted to expand on my thoughts and to give feedback on your work. Well, I better stop writing before someone's head blows up... Yours Truly, Mizuma~!

I am very glad to see that your story has been laid to rest with a respectable ending. One thing that really stuck out to me was that in this last chapter, Angela's personality became very childish which was a large contrast from her former persona. Was this due to a time lapse of sorts or did I miss a beat? Besides that, I am grateful that the story came to a happy ending for Angela and that she got her revenge on her captor/team mates. Thank you for writing and completing your story, it was one in a million that will always be an original! It is people like you that inspire people like me to write and give back to the community. Your efforts are truly inspiring. Yours Truly, Mizuma~!

Huh? I thought I had replied when I last read this but I guess not... For starters, since I last read the story, I had accidently read the date of the last post before I posted wrong. Sorry. Any who, I have been really enjoying the story line and love the relationship that Sam and Jess have formed over the recent chapters. I am also excited about the introduction of Jordan and I am curious as to what situations may lead... Thank you for all your effort, we are very grateful! Yours Truly, Mizuma~!

I really liked the way the story transgressed. When reading it, it felt like I was in the Night club amongst all those people. I myself am also quite a fan of short stories. Funny enough also, as I was scrolling to the bottom of the page, Tsukasa was on every second post, it's quite cute ^-^!

Noooooooo!!! I was afraid this would happen. Every time I get hooked onto a great story like this, it abruptly ends without continuing. I know it's only been two months but I am hoping that you are just taking a little writers break for the holidays and will be back to continue. I'm not trying to sound demanding because I know for one, I ain't your boss and two, you don't even get paid to put your time and effort into this community. What I would like to say is that I am truly grateful for all the hard effort you have made to make this story great and that it will hopefully continue! Trust me, I don't think I'm the only one who would say otherwise. Lastly, Thank you. It is people like you that make this community a better place! Yours Truly, Mizuma~!

I hope their is going to be more in the future as I loved "jealous Alli" and I love this story too~!

This has been a really great story but like most great stories, sadly came short of an ending... Loved your story so far, like you said, the realism of this story really appeals to me as it could really happen. Since it has been well over a year since anyone has posted on this story, I would likely guess it is never going to be finished. If the creator of this story is still active on this site, I would love to see an ending! I know it's unlikely but I am hopeful! Yours Truly, Mizuma~!