Rick's Stroke of Luck - for critique

[BoTox]

This is THE very first story I ever published on the web back in July of 1998. It first appeared on wetset.net in the early days of discovering my different fetishes weren't mine alone.

[WBDaddy]

Oh wow.

[Cute_Kitten]

I felt like it kind of rushed to get to the good parts, and in the process the characters fell a little flat. I liked the idea of the story- the wife was giving me vibes of mental instability yet she still loved him. What made me have a hard time suspending my belief was the characters weren't delved into much. The surface was scratched but made me feel like there was more to it.

[BoTox]

Points taken, it was the first story and it was just a short story.

[Cute_Kitten]

If you hadn't said this was your first story, I would've guessed it was an early one - it has the hallmarks of a beginning writer. I didn't notice any mechanical problems such as grammar, spelling, etc. Comparing it to your work now and you cam see how far you've come and how much you've improved.

[WBDaddy]

Agreed.

[BoTox]

In these threads/stories, I don't notice typos and grammar so much unless they are really glaring. My mind will just gloss right over them. I'm reading for continuity, plot and characters.

[WBDaddy]

Depends on how you want to roll it.