chansu ragedashi

We all think the worst because we've been conditioned by a fantastic author: when things sound too good to be true, expect the other shoe to drop... and hard! (As shown in almost every Bbykimmy story ever written.) (I gotta agree with Kimmy too, that is an adorable handle you picked for the site.) But yes, Kimmy is right when she says the endings aren't 'storybook' but the protagonists typically get enough to be happy.

This was an enjoyable story to read. It took me a second to figure out the scene breaks as gaps in time. I do want to ask, why had she been started down this path in the first place? I understand that the final scene was him getting legal guardianship of her but did you ever explain what led to her being placed under his care in the first place?

I haven't read this story before, but I realized the plot and twist early. I love this idea and I can't wait to read the rest of the story as it's posted!

that sounds about right, the 'shaming voice' being the vanilla teachings of decades. there is possibly a bit of this where she had something happen when she was younger hinted at when Kimmy wrote about her 'dad'

Wonderful chapter. After the second half of the last chapter, we needed some sweetness like that.

Wow! Talk about heavy feelings! But I'm happy that there is a beginning of them getting better! Seems like Dani is having a little fun with her new freedom of personality.

I agree that we haven't heard the last of Kailee, but Bbykimmy gave some major foreshadowing in how Dani is leaping feet-first into the lifestyle... just like Kailee and much faster than Vanessa would like. I made a prediction similar to yours a couple chapters back, but I don't know anymore... maybe the 'broken girl' could end up being Vanessa since she is self-dooming her relationships when the other person isn't precisely who she would like then to be(now I feel like I'm quoting someone myself... I think it was Wannatripbaby that suspected vanessa was destroying her own relationships.)

ha ha riiiiight. I'm certain each and every one of us here has felt murphy's law firsthand. And with all this tension you've spun into the kailee/aubrey problem this is almost torture now to hear that 'nothing will happen'. It's just not in your writing style to leave a character conflict unresolved!

Even more disturbing is that there is no surefire way to totally stop this form of social engineering. I can't find the story anymore but several years ago I read an article about a security blogger that had something crazy like a 28 or 45 character long randomised password and his Google cloud account was breached and all his family photos were deleted by someone using this exact technique here. (Luckily the guy got most of his photos recovered, but the point still stands that social engineering is scary as hell to think about) no matter how secure the server, the human aspect can still be accessed and exploited.

I just caught up and I love the fact that this story is giving me strong deja-vu to the Robert Heinlein book Job: a Comedy of Justice. I can't help but feel that if this were suddenly my reality, just like the protaginists I would probably try to either get back to 'my reality' or to readjust the reality of the wish in some major ways- I would have major issues with the loss of mental acuity and the complete loss of all autonomy. All in all, amazing story, I can't wait to see if a wish can counteract a wish!

the confrontation when Vanessa gets home is inevitable, but i do want to remind everyone that's reading that the title of the story was referenced in this chapter... specifically as what Vanessa is trying to not do! i'm getting this creeping suspicion that the story is going to take a turn for Kailee soon since she's the 'broken girl' at this point, not Dani who enjoyed her first foray into D/S lifestyle and seems not to mind that Vanessa is taking a leading role without needing any hard push. maybe we'll end up with some weird mashup of all 3 of them in the house with a Mommy>BigSis>LilSis happening? i'm just throwing ideas at the wall and hoping some of them stick at this point... @bbykimmy has taken us all on a wild trip with more twists than an M. Night Shyamalan movie! and i love every word of it.

i mean... this is true for everyone! (well alright not everyone, but i did start bopping my head and singing the chorus to the song!) ... and WHOOPS! looks like Dani just got thrown to the deep end on accident.

Plot or not, whatever you write is enjoyable to read.

i wasn't asking for a scene like that silly! i meant that maybe her meeting Jess during dinner after Vanessa's video-call conversation with Seth might help ease Dani's mind -because she and Jess are so similar and she had fun before the evening got ruined. (man, it's hard to be specific enough for a reference to make sense while still being intentionally vague enough to not spoil major story-points for those that might have accidentally clicked past the chapter without having read it.)

@bbykimmy you spoil us all! Like several others said: what a rollercoaster! I couldn't take my eyes off the page. I think with Dani meeting Jess and realizing she's kinda fun, maybe it'll make the transition that Vanessa is fearing a little easier. And I do hope Kailee is saved soon, Aubrey jumped in the wrong way and is nothing but toxic at this point.

Seeing aubrey's inner thoughts, she probably shouldn't be topping for Kailee. but in return Kailee shouldn't be so easily bratting on aubrey. this entire situation is both their faults for not talking it out and setting rules in the first place. If Aubrey tried doing things the correct way, she might see what Vanessa is trying to explain. I did, but I wasn't expecting it to be this. Even in breaking her statement of a sweet story with no darkness or trigger warnings Kimmy surprises us! Also, yeah... that got really dark really quickly there. (Not enough to cause any stress or anxiety, but it does dig up some stuff.)

This is a cute little story. I love how it's something that is relatable to most people on this forum at least on some level or another.

You're not vain, but it reminded me of Drax's quote in the way it was worded. Ive seen those before, if i wasnt already out of space for awesome PJs i might have gotten those or Toothless, I still might get Toothless if I see them online again somewhere.

This made me smile because it reminded me of Drax in Guardians Vol. 2 "I too am incredibly humble" (I'm not saying you're like that or anything, but I read it and my brain associated it with the movie~.) Also, those sloth pajamas are cute. And at capcon I could see you are determined to wear them right until you wear through the fleece.

June 21st on the 'biggest of desires' thread you called breaking the girl a "rather sweet if unconventional love story." And "I haven't had to do a single trigger warning for this story yet, and I don't honestly see myself needing any for Breaking the Girl." That's about as close to an admission that a story isn't gonna go dark as we readers will ever get out of you and your persona of literary mystery.

Precisely! You're making me suspicious when your claim that this story is not going to be dark, while also showing us an all-too-perfect antagonist fighting for the love interest of the main character! It feels SO suspiciously similar to one or two of your D.D. stories that took massively twisted turns not long after introducing a character like Julian. Your previous stories have primed me to expect darkness at this exact point!

@bbykimmy With a title like "breaking the girl" and a 'too squeaky clean' boyfriend... you're making me fear that there's more to him than were hearing and Dani is in trouble! As an example of what I mean, what kind of footprint would Vanessa have online? We know that Aubrey knew about Kailee because they're roommates and friends.

I don't trust kailee, and I agree with a lot of the people stating that what aubrey did is wrong. But maybe having her own consent stepped on is the kind of wake-up that will get through to Kailee what she's doing by trying to involve the unsuspecting public is wrong.

i think Kailee forgot that everyone starts out 'vanilla' at some point ooh... looks like Kailee might need to be the teacher for her new mommy~ this is so exciting to read!

Vanessa here is trying to complete one of the famous herculean tasks: explaining that there is no such thing as unspoken consent in a public spaces! Hell, even in private spaces all consent should be preplanned in some form or another. (Which I think is what she was trying to explain to Aubrey moments later.) But I'm ranting a little now, Anyways awesome chapter! I love the foreshadowing at the end too.