[Ali - Chapter 23 - End of the Road]

I guess I will use this as an example. Every now and again I like to read older stories just to kind of get some inspiration or even just for historical value. A lot of these stories are just gone. I know awhile back, there was a massive corruption epidemic but I hope you have the original story saved somewhere Paws, I would really like to read it again,

[Reilly in diapers]

I don't know about Wannatrip but I read this completely under the assumption that Reilly was lying and just liked diapers. It's certainly an interesting experiment for a story to place the point of view outside of the protagonist because she still very much, IS the protagonist. 

However. Matt. You need to edit this story. Experimentation with structure, this is not. It's difficult to read. spoken dialogue is it's own paragraph, etc eetc you probably already know this so why you left it like this is beyond me.

 

All in all... I liked this idea and its execution. 

[Another Daily Wail article about kids not being toilet trained]

That is incredibly disingenuous, Maly. It is a good summation of sensationalism, not the newspaper. Unless YOU have numbers to back that up.

[Video Game: Perpetual Change]

Hey guys! I recently downloaded the game and was just gonna give a moment by moment tally of potential things I find (for good and ill)

First thing I have to say

[Famous YouTube star jokes about being AB/DL]

Is she actually an ABDL?

[Skylar's new life part two: home]

can you go back and do this for part one? I would like to read both parts in their intended order.

[Read First... No Excuses!]

Who else but you would be responsible for this WB xD Well played.

[Jessica Jones]

You're saying you don't see a diaper there?

[Jessica Jones]

https://www.reddit.com/r/GamerGhazi/comments/3tjoi7/marvels_jessica_jones_was_just_released_on_netflix/

http://mcuexchange.com/spoilers-review-jessica-jones-episode-two-aka-crush-syndrome/

[Jessica Jones]

In the first episode of Jessica Jones on Netflix, a girl is made to wet the bed, in the second, Jessica stops by her upstairs neighbors who are constantly being loud and discovers a couple in the middle of ABDL roleplay. The boyfriend was in a diaper.

[Ali - Chapter 23 - End of the Road]

A slow burn story focused on characters?

[The new family]

The biggest critique I really have is length. Everything feels rushed, cut down and there is little to no detail. Make your chapters longer and the story will improve drastically.