Morning with mommy

[jamielove1997]

Sorry if the spelling and everything isn’t perfect. Have bad dyslexia and working only.

 

You slowly start to stir from your dream as you start to wake up you feel a soft hand slip two fingers into the leg guard of your diaper to see if you managed to stay dry during the night. You open your eyes and see your beautiful mommy in her bath robe staring down at you in your crib. You start to try and speak but your mommy quickly puts your paci back in your mouth before you can talk. Ssshhh baby it’s still early but mommy needs her baby girl to nurse for a little. She helps you out of your crib and your feet fall on the soft pink carpet that is your nursery. You can’t believe how lucky you are only a few short years ago you wouldn’t of believed that you would have your own little nursery let alone a loving mommy. You both slowly walk over to the little corner your guys set up for mornings just like this with soft pillow and blankets for comfort. As she sits down she helps guide you to lay down beside her and she undoes part of her robe exposing her breast to you and she takes your paci out of your mouth and slowly helps guide your mouth to her nipple and as she does you slowly latch on and start to nurse and you breathe in her wonderful scent and perfume. And as you start to nurse you feel the warm milk start to trickle down your throat and you start to close your eyes again and your mommy starts to stroke your hair ever so softly and talks about how much of a good girl you are. After a little bit your mommy helps you switch to the other breast and nurse on that one. While you are nursing on the other breast you start wet your diaper and even though your eyes are closed you feel yourself blush. You still even after all this time can’t get use to using your diaper in front of your mommy. Your mommy seeing you blush knows exactly what you just did and she hushes you and tells you it’s ok she will get you changed after you are done nursing. After you are done nursing finally she helps you unlatch and pops your paci back into your mouth and redoes her robe. End of part 1 let me know if you want more

[minachan16]

I think you could break up the paragraph, but other than that it has a lovely flow and is a very comforting read. More please!  

[~Brian~]

48 minutes ago, minachan16 said:

I think you could break up the paragraph, but other than that it has a lovely flow and is a very comforting read. More please!  

@jamielove1997

I agree with @minachan16story has a good flow, and will work fine when you add more to it. I also agree that you need to break your paragraphs up, because if you don’t, then the person reading this would be having trouble determining where one thought starts in another one ends. If you break up your paragraphs a little bit, then it would be easier to read. When I was in school, I remember one of our teachers showing us the difference.  What he did was to read somebody’s paper without any punctuation at all, and punctuation is a signal for the reader to stop slow down or breathe. When he did that, he was almost out of breath because there were no periods at all in the story and no commas or other punctuation marks.

I like the story idea and think it’s pretty cool, all you have to do is break up the paragraphs and add appropriate punctuation and you’ll be fine. Keep up the good work the story is pretty good, and I can’t wait to see where it goes!

Good Luck!

Brian