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16 hours ago, LGGrace said:
Will will not die, but at times he probably will wish he was dead.
Goodness! Just wanted to say how fascinated I am by this story. 🙂
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I know that there were moments I had issues with along the way, but really this was a very enjoyable read and a strong addition to the DD. Great work! I do have one minor question, though, that I probably should have asked back at the start:
Why call it "A Small Break..." instead of using the obvious pun "A Little Break..."? 🤭
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On 5/2/2024 at 1:18 AM, LostBBoyBear said:
Good thing for those stun rounds you agents keep on you for these situations. Nancy will definitely stand up to trial now. Even here in southern Virgan, I don’t think there’s a jury within 500 miles of here who would convict her as guilty.
Shouldn't this be "find her not guilty"?
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On 4/30/2024 at 9:33 AM, Kat5 said:
And to a lesser extent ... Poor Nancy.
You are a whole lot more sympathetic to her than I am, I'm afraid.
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This is a long-awaited happy chapter, but the fact that it totally relies on events in another story renders it as a deus ex machina. One chapter ends with our protagonist seemingly about to be completely regressed forever, and then the next—with only a quick summary of events in between—she is saved and facing a new and much happier life, which apparently we would know about if we also happened to be reading along with another story simultaneously. Within this story, it comes out of nowhere.
You're not the only one to do something like this, but I find it a disturbing trend...and this is why: a story should be self-contained even if it does connect to things in other stories. A sequel, for instance, should be able to stand on its own and not force readers to go back to another source. I commend you for allowing your universe to branch out by looking at it from various angles, but not when it leads to a chapter that almost literally says if you want to understand this, you'll need to read this other story first...and does say that in an author's note. After following (and enjoying) the story all along, the reader suddenly discovers that the climax it has been heading toward isn't in it at all.
Huh?
BTW: the trial of Nancy is a kind of deus ex machina within a deus ex machina, as we are seemingly about to be hit with the resurgence of a major antagonist who was only defeated by jumping ahead and skipping relevant and important sections. It seems obvious that you are going to free her so she can haunt a sequel...and it also seems totally unjustified by the entirety of the rest of the story.
Sorry I'm being so critical, but I hate it when a good story falls apart at its end, and this time it was so clearly avoidable.
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10 hours ago, Bluebird67 said:
That was really nice; surprisingly sweet for you: I was sure that the twist would be that being “normal” still left him lonely because of his social awkwardness.
Ditto! I'm glad you went in this direction though. 🙂
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My husband and I happened to be in Sturgis during the rally several years ago (the year of the last eclipse, actually). It was certainly pretty amazing.
About the story:
I still stand where I have been before. Sarah (the budding sadist) has to go. Actually, they all should just leave Ian alone so he can be with the one he really loves, and the only one without an agenda of her own, Priscilla. Given Vickie's newfound masochism, I think that she, Sarah, and Rita would make a perfect little family unit...as long as they don't follow through with their plan to force Ian to break into "Princess Pottypants" (a monicker that has always felt utterly wrong in a therapeutic setting). If they do that, absolutely none of them deserves to have anything to do with him and they should all lose their jobs. Sorry: I see a man who desperately needs to love and be loved and also needs someone to care for him, and I don't like these women—especially Sarah—having agendas that only help them.
Just my two cents.
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I do so love these stories!
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I agree with AndTheChips. I have had a very hard time trying to fathom Nancy's character change as well as why Nurse Bee was tolerated at what otherwise appeared to be a generally kind daycare.
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5 hours ago, WriteAndLeft said:
I was in an immediate panic. I could barely move, I was so parallelized by the cold, but I kicked off the backseat into the front seat and managed to swim out the door to the top off the ice.
Strong hands grabbed me under my arms and pulled me out of the water and onto the ice. I shivered and couldn’t feel my feet or my hands, so Hank had to pull me across the ice and back onto the road.
“What are we going to do? Liz got soaked and she’ll freeze to death because it’s so cold outside,” said Sherry. Around us was the downtown area of the town with it’s frozen pond in the center where our car had sunk into the icy hole in the pond.
I was in an immediate panic. I could barely move, I was so parallelized by the cold, but I kicked off the backseat into the front seat and managed to swim out the door to the top off the ice.
Strong hands grabbed me under my arms and pulled me out of the water and onto the ice. I shivered and couldn’t feel my feet or my hands, so Hank had to pull me across the ice and back onto the road.
“What are we going to do? Liz got soaked and she’ll freeze to death because it’s so cold outside,” said Sherry. Around us was the downtown area of the town with it’s frozen pond in the center where our car had sunk into the icy hole.
You've accidentally repeated a few ¶s here. Also: why is the text so very light? It's hard to read...
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13 hours ago, LostBBoyBear said:
As a vulnerable Big with an evolving pro-Big support caregiver
Shouldn't this be a vulnerable little?
13 hours ago, LostBBoyBear said:You’re very welcome, Nancy
How did Nancy get into this conversation? 😉
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Though it is well-written, I'm not enjoying this one as much as the "rules" series. One of the reasons is that I want to like the MC but I'm finding it very hard. I know that kids this age can be cruel and unfeeling, but how is it possible for someone who is actively trying to get put into diapers to be so judgmentally negative about a girl she meets who actually wears them? I mean the girl is utterly obsessed by them; this reaction is not very likely. It would be one thing if she were just going along with her friend, but she is clearly thinking these thoughts on her own. I'm not suggesting that kids need to act or think in a consistent manner, but this just seems incomprehensible to me.
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Somehow you reposted the same chapter.
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This was five years ago???
I don't remember seeing it at all, but Poco's bump unveiled it as a very promising piece. 🙂
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I have not commented yet because I am just catching up on this story, but I do want you to know that I enjoy it thoroughly. It is sweet and adorable, and among the best of the "arrested growth" genre of ABDL stories. 🙂
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3 hours ago, BabySofia said:
could she have passed on being trans to Carly?
Dunno...but I passed it on to my son, apparently.
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16 hours ago, Kat5 said:
He mumbled a few random things into the boob he had his face in. “I ate an entire ostrich.” was one of them. And “I killed all the dinosaurs. They were delicious.” was another.
I laughed out loud. 🙂
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15 hours ago, AlexTheAlex said:
The butterflies seemed to flutter viciously this morning,
I can confidently say that this is the first time I've ever heard butterflies called "vicious." 😉
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Wow. This is a very powerful chapter and so well-written. Great work!
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On 2/15/2024 at 7:54 AM, SashaButters said:
Insinuating circumstances or not
Do you mean "extenuating"?
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I am another one of those people who glommed onto this story right at the beginning and continued to enjoy it all the way to the end. It's a thoroughly enjoyable piece of fiction whether or not the reader happens to be ABDL.
Thank you for it, MW.
I also enjoyed The Baby Once Again, and I'm about to procure All My Girlfriend's Rules. 🙂
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Just curious: how do measurements work here? For instance, how would the agent know what John meant by "miles"? Surely, even if they use the same units in that world, they mean vastly different things.
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On 1/29/2024 at 4:29 PM, Kat5 said:
Every morning he woke up as mentally functional as a frozen meal
Great line! lol
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Wow. I somehow had fallen three chapters behind in this, one of my favorite stories! But now I am caught up and (of course) loving every page! One thing I really admire is the way that you allow the tension to settle down and remain in lull for extended periods...as it obviously would in real life...before suddenly erupting again. And you handle both so well. 🙂
AARDVARK, PLATYPUS, AND TWINKLETOES: ATTORNEYS AT LAW (SCENE 9: DESTINY'S CHILD)
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Honestly, I think that's easy. Sarah is a very unsympathetic person, IMHO. And she proves it once again here: not only does she seem to revel in revealing her sexual dominance over Ian to one of the girls in his charge (and a potential student) but she is once again—as usual—thinking only about herself. I really hope that we are getting close to the chapter (of either story) in which she gets her comeuppance and Ian realizes what a monster she is. I think that, with the sincere love between him and "the batgirl," he is thisclose to real happiness.