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Thank you for sharing your feedback and thoughts on the story so far! The conflicts you've described do make an appearance later on in the story. Maya, despite her desire to be treated as a peer, has already demonstrated that she can't handle that emotionally at this point in the story. Meekah and Sydney can both sense that Maya has been through something traumatic by her behaviors, and they are doing their best to avoid upsetting her. Maya has also not communicated any of her background to Meekah or Sydney very much at this point; and we only see things from Maya's perspective, so we don't see what's going on in anyone else's head. They both have their reservations and feelings on what the right thing for Maya would be, and there will be friction around that later. Thanks for reading!

Ear plugs.  I have to have ear plugs.  I use a cpap machine so the noise would drive me nuts.  I also have a night time retainer so that has to be in there too.  I like my rooms cool as well...too warm and I can't sleep.  

I see what you mean. Meekah and Sydney tend to be extremely patient with Maya, explaining the same things to her over and over, negotiating with her. Their explanations feel thought through like rehearsed speeches. That is great for Maya, but I'd argue it isn't the best for the story. I begin to skim through the dialogue at times because I feel like I've read it already. Explaining things thoroughly in dialogue also leaves less for the reader to piece together from subtext which can have the consequence of making a story less engaging. I'd like to see cracks in the perfect character of Meekah. Perhaps her patience ultimately runs thin and she says something before thinking it through, triggering a trauma from Maya's past which has been brought up in the story many times. Maybe it will be something that festers in Maya a while before they confront it together. Or perhaps Meekah starts to struggle balancing hearing Maya's opinion and making what she thinks are correct decisions for her, seeing Maya as less capable than she objectively is, the great fear of Maya. Meekah loves to care for Maya, therefore getting carried away would befit her. It doesn't have to mean Meekah is immediately ruined as a character to a reader. It rather makes her feel more human. Ultimately it's of course for you as an author to decide what aspects you want to bring into the story and what you want the story to be to its readers. I just want my feedback to inspire thoughts you may not have had about the story. The world you're building is intriguing and I want to see more of it. You're more of an author than me, alone for actually writing and finishing your stories, instead of being debilitated by perfectionism. Hence, take my feedback with a bucket or two of salt. If you feel like you are not looking for this kind of feedback, do tell me, and I'll stick to speculating the plot and commenting on the events of the story.

Amazing job keep up the good work. I look forward to reading more to come and ready for the nexts chapter 

Abena L4 with a booster pad and plastic pants with a t-shirt and white socks.