coletheriolu Posted December 31, 2016 Share Posted December 31, 2016 Good story Error: "Neither!" Felicity barked. Shouldn't it be Robin barked instead? Link to comment
SGTbaby Posted January 1, 2017 Share Posted January 1, 2017 Excellent story...the threat was well done and I can only imagine the fun and humiliation they have left to go!! Link to comment
babybb Posted January 1, 2017 Share Posted January 1, 2017 oh boy just when i thought it wouldn't get any Link to comment
coletheriolu Posted January 3, 2017 Share Posted January 3, 2017 Warning: No errors detected Great story. Can't wait to see what's next Link to comment
Cya Posted January 6, 2017 Author Share Posted January 6, 2017 Part Seven: Punishment Link to comment
SGTbaby Posted January 6, 2017 Share Posted January 6, 2017 Yeah road trip!! Looking forward to the future Link to comment
coletheriolu Posted January 6, 2017 Share Posted January 6, 2017 Ok this enema thing really grossed me out. Don't want to be rude but to me it's just plain wrong. Good stroy though, keep it up. Link to comment
aldl4811 Posted January 10, 2017 Share Posted January 10, 2017 Great character development and pacing, I look forward to reading more. Link to comment
deewet Posted January 10, 2017 Share Posted January 10, 2017 What a fitting punishment though, certainly would get my attention. Link to comment
Cya Posted January 11, 2017 Author Share Posted January 11, 2017 Part Eight: A Funny Thing Happened On The Way To The Market Felicity slung the diaper bag over her right shoulder and picked up both girls. The pirates could only marvel at her strength as the trio made there way down the stairs, which only stirred up Robin's belly, and approached the front door. Felicity opened the door to the broom closet by the front door and pulled out a double stroller. Robin groaned slightly during all of this, feeling that the worse part of this was still to come. She had to remind herself that this woman could really do whatever she wanted to her and get away. She turned to Nami with sad eyes and tried to somehow quietly explain the situation. Nami knew Robin must be in pain and was saddened that she couldn't do anything for her friend while Felicity deposited both pirates into the stroller and strapped them in. "Silly mommy almost forgot your bonnets." Link to comment
babybb Posted January 11, 2017 Share Posted January 11, 2017 love the ending but sad also cause i really enjoyed the story alot. Link to comment
coletheriolu Posted January 12, 2017 Share Posted January 12, 2017 Aw man it's over? Dang, good story though Link to comment
SGTbaby Posted January 12, 2017 Share Posted January 12, 2017 It was a good story. I do wish there had been more to it but it was still good. I look forward to the next one. Link to comment
little Shao Posted January 13, 2017 Share Posted January 13, 2017 That was quiet something different. I didn't expect to find a One Piece story here. I loved the details! Anyway great story, I Link to comment
CDfm Posted January 16, 2017 Share Posted January 16, 2017 I really liked this story. I was sad to see it come to an end. I actually thought there could be quite a bit more of it and that the ending came pretty fast. I guess you could also argue that it wasn't overdone and ended after the little pirates had been humiliated just enough. I will be watching for your next story. Link to comment
keith60 Posted October 16, 2023 Share Posted October 16, 2023 there was not much of the story that sucked ! Link to comment
Menaiya Posted October 16, 2023 Share Posted October 16, 2023 Most of the story was lost due to the server corruption a few years ago. Your comments are not needed nor are welcome. Link to comment
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