JamesGarland Posted August 25, 2010 Share Posted August 25, 2010 The Immaturity of Amy Stone This is the story of Amy Stone, an immature eighteen-year-old girl whose mum puts her in nappies as a punishment for her immature behaviour. Amy Stone was eighteen years old and very immature for a girl her age. She was so immature that her mum was getting tired of it. “Right then, young lady I have a new rule for you to abide by. Link to comment
Isshun ga Posted November 23, 2010 Share Posted November 23, 2010 I would date her out of sympathy and see if I could grow her up. 1 Link to comment
pink nappies Posted November 25, 2010 Share Posted November 25, 2010 This could be a good idea for a story if it was much, much slower. You have rushed into one paragraph what should take several chapters of situation building. As it stands now the story is completely unbelievable. The character Amy barely says two words, we have no background at all and her mother gives little reason for her actions. I want to encourage you so I will say I'd like to see this story made into more. Try taking only the first sentence and turning it into a whole chapter. Then you might be onto something. 1 Link to comment
Total Trash Posted December 1, 2010 Share Posted December 1, 2010 The Immaturity of Amy Stone This is the story of Amy Stone, an immature eighteen-year-old girl whose mum puts her in nappies as a punishment for her immature behaviour. Amy Stone was eighteen years old and very immature for a girl her age. She was so immature that her mum was getting tired of it. “Right then, young lady I have a new rule for you to abide by. Link to comment
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