kruserky

From the technical aspect, very well written. From the content aspect, disturbing. I think I've read enough torture for one story.

I concur with CS, as far as being used over and over again, but I also agree that it has been well written thus far. A well written story can follow a familiar premise and still be entertaining as long as you give it character. I look forward to see some additions.

I find the premise interesting enough, but the story, in it's present format, is less than easy to read. A bit of dialogue inserted into a vague story is tough to read. A little suggestion, choose a tense like past tense and write it from a perspective of a character. Not trying to criticize, just a suggestion.

Pretty strong story, thus far, just make sure you start taking a bit of time to do a once over and check the spelling errors and I also noticed a few punctuation errors, as well... Not a big deal. Good job.

Lol, take pity. I'll tell you what, if I get "A Change for Naomi" finished I'll take a look at it, and maybe try writing an addition. I wouldn't expect any time soon based on the fact I don't get much time to write anymore, but I'll take a look at the possibility.

Don't worry about it, butI wouldn't expect anyone to start writing an addition to it.

Please god no. Lonewolf writing a story would be be like trying to translate aramaic...

I concur, spectrumshade. Lonewolf, no one asked you to JUST write it. So stop being a spaz. For all you know cmc could be the next great writer on this board.

Cnc, try writing it yourself. Don't be afraid. You'll be fine, and you can't be any worse than some others... Just kidding, but give it a try.

Is it just me or is this a DL post, not AB? Stay in those threads for comments of sub posts

Wow this an, unnecessarily hostile post. Good lord. Who cares whether its true and who cares whether he believes it or not. Get the hell over it

I think this story is a goner... Hope I'm wrong, but it seems to be a safe bet.

Not the most original, with the drugged regression, but interesting none the less. Good job

I've really enjoyed this story so and hope you keep it going. Nice pace as well.

I am inpressed with how well you structure your story, but I admit they are a bit on the distressing side. I understand that the story is based on physical regression of an adult but it still verges on a pedaphilia based story, based on 10 month old children being sexually pleasured. I doubt that is your intention, but it is the way I see it. I'm sure I'll get angry replies, but its pretty obvious.