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[ghbabdl]

It all started when he was younger and his brothers and sisters wet the bed. He was the good one, he was always dry. Then one day his mum decided that they would be taught a lesson, she would make his brothers and sister wear cloth nappies and plastic pants, this would embarrass them so much they would stop wetting.
He stood there and watched as each one got diapered, instead of feeling smug he felt jealous. As the weeks went on he just craved to wear a nappy and plastic pants, he would sneak spare plastic pants and wrap a towel between his legs...... oh it felt so good. If only he could wet them too!!!
That was the beginning and after long breaks and short periods in his life wearing ( often made up attempts) he discovered the internet and his life changed.
Suddenly he found many styles of plastic pants and diapers, he started to wear with caution and full enjoyment.
As his confidence grew he became reckless, he wore at work, in the car, at the supermarket and even down the gym. He sat in the Jacuzzi and watched his diaper balloon so much he could barely walk, he leaked at work and his diaper showed on one of his many trips out.
It was getting silly, this was an obsession, yet he did not wear every day sometimes going weeks in between.
Then one day he was in the supermarket and as he was trying to buy some Huggies Dry Nites (8-15 years) without being obvious. A middle aged man commented about how his 10 year old needed them so often, he wished that he could just think about them being on him and they would appear.( this would save him so much money) I agreed and said I wish I could do the same and if it worked in the day as well it would be magic. We both laughed.file:///C:/Users/Admin/AppData/Local/Temp/msohtml1/01/clip_image001.gif
As I picked up a pack he passed me 2 vouchers and said I should use it for a discount but I should read the terms and conditions. I paid at the till and used one but did not read the terms. When I got home it all started .................................


First time story so let me know your thoughts
ghbabdl@yahoo.co.uk

[diaperpt]

1. I'm not positive myself what would constitute an LGBT story, but will this be going in that direction or is it more a story for the main story forum?

2. You've switched from 3rd person to 1st in the last 3 or 4 sentences. This can be a technique in a longer work, but I'm not sure it's so successful here.

3. I would try to develop the story more. It's OK that the very beginnings of the story are brief (childhood), but I would develop much more about the blossoming of his adult use. Some of your sentences could be filled out to several paragraphs.

My hope is that you won't be discouraged by these comments. Use them or dismiss them and continue writing.